Feedback on Rough Cut
//ROUGH CUT VIDEO
//ROUGH CUT COMMENTARY VIDEO
Below are my responses to the feedback of the rough cut of our short film.
Callum Baker
I’m glad he got the point of the narration. We wanted it to have strong narration and hint towards a documentary style. I can’t take credit for the camera work so well done to Joe Barden for doing a good job there. The transitions at the end were used to cover up continuity mistakes of the character, Paul, when he walks down the stairs. He leads on the wrong foot in each shot. I understand that it doesn’t look good and slows down the pace of the film and probably contributed towards Callum’s next point that the film is long-winded at times. This scene will need to be re-shot and we need to become more aware of continuity issues.
Chloe Robinson
Well done to myself and Joe Barden for doing a good job with the sound editing. I agree with the point that the introductory shots last to long. This point will be taken into consideration when we re-edit the film and we will probably shorten the introduction. Her point about a few shots going out of frame was done deliberately to connote that the room was small and it was also done to add effect.
Grace Davis
I agree that the role of the mother wasn’t made clear. She is supposed to be a ghost-like figure but this point didn’t come across. We will have to take this into consideration and think if there is a better way to make this point.
I disagree with her point about the set design, although I’m slightly confused about this comment I get the impression that she wasn’t clear on what the set was suppose to be. The general feel of the whole film is that you slowly learn more and not everything is revealed straight away.
Tanya Reynolds
Her first point about the association between the mise-en-scene and white and how this created a chemical and clinical feel was done unintentionally. I love her overuse of the word “perfect”. Her point about the music and how the meaning of the music changes from the start as it is cheery and then at the end it is more “morbid”. This was also done unintentionally.
Emma Horton
That point about the transitions being “good” I disagree with, as mentioned before, the transitions at the end slowed down the pace of the film. However, I do agree with the point about the music. Generally it was positive feedback.
Camilla Braine
I’m glad that the empathy part of the film came across, this was important to keep the audience entertained. I also agree with the point about the walking away shot. It needs to be made clearer what exactly is happening. The music at the beginning will be revised and where it starts and cuts out will be changed.
Danah Hussain
Danah’s point about getting the sound sorted is a valid point, it isn’t equal throughout and we will correct this before the final product. As mentioned before, the pace of the film will be re-evaluated.
Overall
Overall, it’s all positive. A lot of the suggested altercations will be implemented but me and the group are happy with the responses.
Final Film Feedback
//FINAL FILM
Below are some of the comments from people who had seen the film. This audience was a different age group audience of all adults instead of students.
Becky (Knee deep in the media industry) – It was very good. However, I knew the whole time that he was a crime scene cleaner. I didn’t get the impression that he was anything else. One critic is that there is too much of the monologue. Films are a visual media not an auditory.
Geoff Shephard (aka Paul Bison, leading role) – I’m impressed, you can see a lot of hard work has gone into making this film, I should know. Being part of a production like this really gave me an insight into the workings and mechanics of the film industry. Now I understand why it takes so long for films to be made.
Miss Wells (English & media teacher) – It was really good. The running monologue reminded me of the programme talking faces if you’ve ever heard of it. I think it was a BBC programme where they had people talk about themselves in this ongoing monologue much like your film.
Avis (English degree, film studies course and devoted mother) – The overalls looked good; I’m glad all that money didn’t go to waste. I got the sense of the sets and the character being clinical by the use of the colour white. Mr Shephard performed wonderfully and should consider a new career. This maybe unrelated, but in one of your postcards it had “close tightly” on the lid of a bottle. I got the impression that the main character (Paul) was also closed tightly and in this film he let it all out.
Ancillary Texts Feedback
To find out the opinions of my ancillary texts I conducted some research by using questionnaires to find out some quantitative data and will represent them in graphs.
Postcard Question Results
Did you understand that this is a postcard promoting a film? (Yes/No)
I’m happy with this result as the main purpose of the postcard was to show that this is a new film. When questioned further participants released that the postcard was for a film when they saw the back.Did you like the postcard? (Yes/No)
Slightly upsetting as a third didn’t like them. When questioned further those who disliked it didn’t like the blandness of the postcard.On the basis of the postcard alone, would you go and watch the film? (Yes/No)
This question is crucial as it is the main purpose of the postcard. However, sadly it is a 50/50 split. Perhaps another element was required to get people attending the film which at the end of the day matters.Review Question Results
Do you think this is from a real Total Film Magazine? (Yes/No)
A full pie, this has made me happy. That means it is authentic enough by the visuals and the written to appear in an Total Film magazine.Would you be inclined to watch the film after reading this review? (Yes/No)
More are willing to watch the film after reading the review, which is great news. When questioned further, some but all said they simply don’t like short films. Sometimes, you can’t please everyone.
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